Presentation:
Did you use any resources?
Yes, I used the resources as plectrum because the audience could see it.
Were the resources relevant and attractive?
Yes, I belive that this resource was relevant why it captived the audience.
Body, language and eye contact:
Did you look at your audience most of the time?
No, I recognize that I look the audience at the first but, by the time in the end I didn’t llok the audience.
Did you read from your notes ?
No, I didn’t use my notes, I belive that if you don’t read your notes the presentation will be better!
Did you do any gestures/movement to hold the attention of your audience?
Good, I do movement of arms to point in the pictures also I use the hands and I use the expressions of face, for example, When I think about the date that my group of music started play. Also I smile why I belive that if you smile cause that the audience are interesting for the presentation, fi you are very serious the audience boring.
Structure:
Did you organize your ideas in order of importance?
yes, first I said the title of my presentation and the subject of the presentation. After I told that I play the guitar and like it is in general. Then I told about my group and the components, afterwards I mentioned the concerts, and next in the end I said that the group disssapared.
Did you use discourse markers to make your ideas more clear? (First, then, secondly, on the one hand, on the other, finally…)
Well, no, I only used “in the end”.
Content:
Did you introduce interesting, NEW information to your audience?
Good I anunced that the bandera negra dissapeared this summer, I belive that this information is interestink because everybody like the music!
Did you look up information/facts/ideas in the Internet/books…?
I used internet for showed a film of the second concert in youtube.
Was your information more superficial or more detailed and original?
the information was more detailed that superficial because I mentioned the components , the why we created this group of music, the date that we started practise, the concerts the best concert, and the why the group dissapeared.
I think that content was original because no everybodyhave a group of music and they play for the public.
Language:
Did you use check your grammar? (verbs, word order…)
I used verbs in the past simple and continous.
Did you use rich vocabulary looking up the dictionary? (synonyms, new words, expressions…)
I used a expression on english “ pull my leg”, I used this expression in the finally of the presentation.
I used a new words as plectrum and low.
Also I used synonyms as In the end/to end.
Did you use sentence linkers? (and, but, moreover, also, furthermore, although, however…)
Yes, I used the connector “also” when I said: <>. Also I used “but” and “and”.
Did you use fillers? (well, you know, for example, one second, repeating a word…)
Good, I only used “well”. When I said: “ well, now I introduce the components of bandera negra”.
Pronunciation & Intonation
Did you know how to pronounce all your words? Did you check the pronunciation with a dictionary, a classmate or the teacher?
Well, I belive that I didn’t know how to pronunce all my words, I check the pronunciation with dictionary.
Did you change your tone of voice or use a monotone tone all the time?
I change my otne of voice, but I mostly use a monotone tone.
Did you speed in a fluid continuum or with breaks and interruptions?
I spoke fluid and continuum, but sometime I was speechless.
Self-Evaluation:
You are your teacher! What mark did you get?? ;-)
I believ that I deserve a....almost a eight!!! :p
2- Now it’s time to improve for next presentation. Write down a LITERAL TRANSCRIPTION of your presentation.
Check your Language and Structure. Can you correct your mistakes??
Hello class my name is Màrius and I will talk about my group of music and this dissapeared this summer.
I started play the guitar five years before aproximatly. I started classic guitar and later I bought the electric guitar.
This photo I play my electric guitar for play electric guitar I use a plectrum. If you want see the plectrum.
This is a logo of the my group of the music, the name is bandera negra and we play a differents styles of music....oi! punk street and rock.
I introduce the components of bandera negra:
Josep maria puig nou, alias pepe, he play a drums.
Marc colls he play the low.
Gerard ripoll, he is the singer and I play the guitar.
And sara lopéz she play the guitar.
We created the group of music because we play a different instruments and we like this idea.[...]
This is a first essay. The first essay we play started in August 2006 and we play in the sala of castelló every Saturday. “ ripoll, I mar colls and pepe.
Sara hasn’t yet play because she tsarted in december 2006.
This photo is the first concert in correllengua castelló in september. So sara isn’t play. This concert was fantastic for be the first concert the people said that we play good.
This photo is the second concert, the second concert was better than the first concert because sara play in the group and we could the new songs and we could do solos of electric guitar. The second concert is in castelló in february 2007. [...]* and we last concert this summer with the other group the name is ara mateix, this is the last concert because after pepe went the other group, he pull our leg!
Well to end I showd you the video of the concert of february.
[...]**
Correction:
Note:
[...] = it symbolizes things that I didn’t say
- I will talk about my group of music and this dissapeared this summer.
I will talk about the my group of music and that this dissapeared this summer.
In this picture.
- This is a logo of the my group of the music, the name is bandera negra
This the logo of the my group of the music, the her name is bandera negra.
the more difficult was find a singer but, in the end we find one person that we like. He was a friend of ours.
In this picutre you can see saraplayed the guitar.
Thanks for listening.
